What Do You Think Of My Second Chapter/Part Of My Book? Is It Good Or Bad?

Seems interesting. Perhaps more description of where the character is and the surroundings rather than just speech almost all of the time? Or even some description of the voices of these Logan and Lilly characters. I haven't read chapter one, however, so these might be included there. Also I don't think there can be "steel iron hinges", it's one or the other :)